Hi ER ,
If you wish to pursue what we discussed, do not give up just yet.
I know this is a short story but try to review this article,
http://www.writing-world.com/fiction/novelplot.shtml
paying attention to the hook and the Climax/Denouement.
You might be struggling a bit but you are making headway. Try and ask yourself what makes it mythical as opposed to a good read.
I'll PM a more elaborate critique if you want.
Mad Lews

PS I may be waiting for you up one level so revel in the tender mercies of the Dean whilst you can.