Cheerleaders' Rape and Torture by Semiater

[Rabbit1]

you all are seeing exactly what a writer should try to do

1 Try to make the reader feel that they are there--thru detail decriptions

2 Make it real--- as close to real life as possible --unless it is Sifi

3 Using proper grammar and spelling

4 Do not force the story ---let it flow

5 Most important ---be satisfied with the story yourself before publishing it

these are some of the most basic rules of writing-- there are others and we will see them as we continue to look at stories here

[Nikita]

I've only read the first two chapters of Cheerleaders story, but I just cannot walk away from it and consider these comments to hold true for the rest of the story. That said, I'll review it online for the author once I'm finished wanking to the rest of it. If it is a two wanker, the guy gets a ten! :

Here is my opinion of the first chapter:

1. The author's style, written in the first person, contains so much realism with inner dialogue, that I was laughing at his candor and amusement at the girls distress through most of it. Yes, laughter, revulsion, and the scary realism.

2. The description of the girls, their various physical attributes, as well as their facial expressions and behaviors, complete some form of character development of the victims. The author's already given us insight as to where he's coming from.

3. I can't help but wonder, if the author is writing from inside the protagonist. Is he like this sadistic fuck that he portrays?

I'd sure like to hear Semiater's side of the story, the inspiration, and how he got inside the character. Think you can arrange for the author to post some responses to these questions here Rabbit? Nothing like hearing it from the horse's mouth. :