Thanks, H Dean. I'm looking forward to the rest of your nit-picking. I agree that "the latter of which" would definitely read better. One of these days, I'll figure out when it's better to be more wordy and when it's better to be less wordy. I have quite a propensity for wordiness which Rose was rightly fond of pointing out to me.

I think a child might tend to be more wordy with their writing. In circles I hung out in as a child, writing with run on sentences (i.e., extra long and drawn out sentences which is not what a grammarian would refer to as a "run on sentence") was a pet peeve of my teachers to point out to me and my classmates. However, a good case can be made for more simplistic wording and phrasing too. I'm not sure what would work better here. Perhaps a combination of both?

Anyway, I'm looking forward to any and all suggestions you might offer. Thanks again for taking a look at this.