Good job Razor,
They seem made for each other.
My one hesitation is the mannerisms & habits, I was looking more for stops before mirrors and smiles to check his teeth, twists her scarf into tight knots when nervous, always runs his/her hand through hair,type things. The kind of visual cues you can use to identify your culprit in print without having to constantly use their name or he said, she said.
Not a big deal we can wing that on the fly.
First I'd like a third person seduction from the Professors point of view, Use your two profiles, go a little wild, this is in the development stage, but try to stay around two to three thousand words.
Best of luck
Mad Lews






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