Well, she's submitting very quickly, doesn't she?

Though not the most original story around here, it's nicely written, especially the beginning. The first lines manage to create a somewhat idealized situation without using many words. The reader isn't even led into temptation to ask how they have met or how the girl can leave her whole live behind her to follow her lover.

I saw some word repititions (for example: "...back into the girl's pretty mouth. The wife spoke, "I have wanted you since I laid eyes on you, you are a pretty little thing."), but that are details.

All in all it's a good work.