Here are a few thoughts. These are the sorts of things I think about and worry about in the endless draftings of my own stories.

You seem a bit timid about getting criticism. Let me just say this before you read on. The last thing I want you to do is to take every comment I make as truth. These are all opinions. It is your job to convince yourself whether or not you agree. Use what you agree with and trash the rest. Got it?

I have had some of my work published but I've only ever been paid in copies. I'm no kind of authority.

I've only done the first bit. If you find this helpful, I can do more.

"Sadly, I walked from the only bedroom into the front of our cabin..."

What does 'sadly' really mean? Unpack 'sadly'. Show us 'sadly' without using the word.

"The preacher looked over at me one last time and, without saying a word, left. Clark walked over and took my arm, pulling me towards the barn. I tried to fight, I kicked and hit, but to no avail, he was too strong."

Why does she suddenly fight? What's up with the sudden fear? It isn't unbelievable, I just want a reason for it. This is a good opportunity to show us a little more about who she is and how she thinks. But, honestly, wouldn't it make more sense if she fought when she saw he meant to bind her?

"My mind was racing..."

Cliche. Lose it. I can see that you are a better writer than this so it reads a little lazy.

"while stilling pulling on my left nipple."

You see the mistake here, I'm sure.

"Like a sack of feed, he swung me off his shoulder..."

This is brilliant. Don't take it out, no matter what. 'Sack of feed', it's almost onomonopiea. It just sounds brute.

"It trickled down, splashing on my face"

It wouldn't splash if it were trickling. See what I mean?