Help! i'm stuck!

[Alex Bragi]

Yes, I think it's very well written too.

I would have enjoyed a little more dialog. For me, character's voices really bring a story to living breathing 3D in my head. I saw many opportunities where I felt the character's telling it rather than the author would have worked better-- for me at any rate. The dialog that's been included is very realistic and believable, so the author is clearly very capable.

I would love to get inside that little heathen boy's head too, sick little bunny that I am. Is he strong and crying out of anger and frustration? Or, is he weak and about to break? And, what about that pious priest? Is he struggling with his own demons or does he secretly realise what a fuckard he really is? Enquiring minds need to know so please don't keep us waiting.

It's a great start and I'm looking forward to reading more.

Nice work cbtboy.