my 2nd assignment

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Hi Aussiegirl1,

thanks for your rieview. I changed my story according to your suggestions and joined the two parts. I altered to the end a little too.

I didn't know funny and fun is that different. I used the Altavista translation service for this specific sentence. I chaged from funny to wonderful, I hope that's OK...

I thought I could publish this story on the main site too, after I have completed level one. What do you think?

So here is the final version (at least up to now. )