I loved the story so far. I thought the sentences were alright, but then I read obsessively and do very good at comprehension. I would think instead of breaking some of the more complex sentences down just add more simple sentence before and after the particularly lengthy ones.

And the time frame is a bit jumbled but it makes sense because you explain things as they come up instead of in chronological (wow, spelled that right without spell check!) order which isn't bad.

As for ideas to continue, maybe Br Stefan is a closet sado-masochist and has the boy sodomize him? In any case I definitely get the feeling that Fr Ignacio was just a introductory character or maybe the antagonist (not necessarily the villain just the anti-protagonist, protagonist is Br Stefan maybe?)

Regardless of how you go about it I can't wait to read the finished product.

Sana