Part of the reason I'm writing a reply to this thread is that I would like encourage a discussion of stories on this forum and nobody else seems to be jumping in on this one. Having said that, I don't really have anything new to say about the story in question. Your comments are almost exactly what I would have said if you hadn't beaten me to it.

I didn't find this story to be erotic, but nonetheless I'm glad I read it. It was well written and it was different. It was also concise. The author said what she had to say and got out. I'm normally of the opinion that you can't do a short story properly in under 10,000 words, but this one covered the subject adequately in very little space.