It certainly wasn't a complaint. I just prefer a 'neat and calm layout', if that is even possible in a post on a forum.

One other thing: Why that many brackets? If you put something in brackets you more or less imply to me that it isn't really important and if it isn't really important my next question is: Is it necessary? And if it isn't, why does the author force me to read something that isn't necessary?

When I edit in German everything in brackets is automatically deleted, unless it's an explanation or an abbreviation that is used again later in the text.
But then again I'm feared for my bitchiness and liberal use of the delete button amongst our writers.

And I just wanted to start my rant about exclamation marks, but then I noticed that you only used them in the girl's lines of thought.
Generally my opinion about exclamation marks is that if a writer needs them he has failed to find the right words to let the reader now that what he said is important. Except, of course, in direct speech.