You are welcome, lil ash.

Without pushing the topic I just want to give an example as to my comment about punctuation:

“Delivery for an M. K. Jensen, miss.” the man said.

The full stop before the closing question mark has to be a comma. One line below it is made correctly, and none of the other mistakes is more "grave" than this one. So you see in what small dimensions my grammar comment was moving...


By the way: I have to update my foregoing post. I made it to Level Four! In Level Three was no tutor, either. So, pointing to my posted stories in Level Three, Library, Writers' Society etc., I asked Torq to grant me access to the final Level. With that I would like to say that your interest for the Writer's Block should not be dimmished by your experience with your first assignment. Keep on writing, post in the free fora of the Writers' Society. Feed back will come.