After Action Report


“I have the AAR on the rescue operation sir.”

“Bring it in then, anything interesting?”

“You could say that sir.”

Looking up at Captain Mikhael James, Admiral Harrison realized that the
Captain had never before personally delivered an After Action Report before. (Dean will want a rewrite 2 many before s).
She set the intelligence briefing aside and looked at him.

“Something I should know?”

“Yes Sir.”

“Want to tell me?”

“No Sir.”

This was definitely unusual. Mikhael had never been this formal with her, and had never refused to tell her what was on his mind before.

“Let’s see it then.”
(Very nice set up)

After Action Report 1315 Operation Recover SOG-4, Cdr. Fraks.


Arrival at the suspected base was according to plan and apparently undetected. Infiltration went according to pre op plans. Approach to primary entry point was underway when contact made with pirate who was in an unseen cave. First contact resulted in minor causality and fatality of pirate. Enemy base also alerted.
(this type report would include precise times and locations/ enemy contact 1.7 clicks NNW of objective at 13:42 hrs resulted in…)

Immediately (give an actual time instead of ‘immediately’) implemented fallback plan and attempted secondary entry point. This entry was rigged and SOG-4 took two casualties, both fatal.

SOG-4 then retreated
(how about 'At (time) SOG-4 initiated tactical redeployment under heavy weapons fire' )
and suffered heavy weapons fire
(Grunts don’t suffer fire, they are to paid endure it and will rise to the challenge with a certain sullen pride)
from unanticipated emplacements. CES Lexington reported contact with 3 enemy cruisers and was unable to supply cover fire. Lexington then reported heavy damage and casualties. Contact with Lexington was lost.
( ...was lost at (time), I Would love to read that AAR)

SOG-4 Bravo team disengaged to circle the emplacements. At that point (again a precise time lends an authentic feel and catches the reader up in the pace of the battle) sensors detected the presence of heavy equipment closing on our location. Initial reports indicated multiple tanks and large concentrations of infantry. SOG-4 Alpha ordered an immediate disengagement from enemy forces and rendezvous at point Omega.

SOG-4 went to max stealth mode and broke into individual fists. Disengagement was successful for three of ten fists. The rest fought a retrograde action. At that point enemy air support arrived and detected the three fists that were disengaged, directing enemy ground forces to their locations.

(OK this brings about an opportunity to put some numbers on the board. How big is a fist?(5?) making the rescue team 50. It’s a fair guess and a reader might make it but you could make that a little easier, since the report is to a military commander and such info would be a given you have to be clever as to how you tell the reader, maybe by breaking down the casualties of an individual fist, foxtrot fist surprised and eliminated suffering 4 confirmed deaths, FN Goode missing and presumed captured. That sentence would serve two purposes both giving a number to the size of a fist and creating the MIA you use later.)

At this point communication broke down and sensors went offline. For a period of approximately
(Nope it would be precise( At (time ) comms and sensors went down for 16 minutes 23 seconds))
15 minutes, all electronics went down. Multiple explosions throughout area of engagement indicated battle was ongoing.
When com links and sensor network reset indications were that a massive strike against all enemy positions and forces had eliminated them.
(Maybe something like ‘had suppressed all resistance)
Survey( maybe initial recon) indicated one hundred percent casualty rate among enemy forces, but no fatalities.

SOG-4 casualties amounted to an additional seven personnel, one fatality, and one MIA. Two fists were detached from group. Fist SOG-4 A five was assigned to find the MIA. Fist SOG-4 B five was assigned to care for all the casualties.

Primary objective of entry into enemy facility and was now possible through main entrance. Initial entry made by sensor drone indicated more enemy casualties. Casualty rate appeared to be consistent with previous recorded rates outside the facility.

No apparent collateral damage to facility indicated. No indication as to the method of incapacitating such large numbers of personnel indicated.
(No residual chemical, electromagnetic, or biological agents detectable(first thing a good officer would suspect and check for))
Highly recommend research into method used. (See appendix for attached 3V.)

(Perimeter was secured and) All remaining Fists of SOG-4 entered facility and search instituted
( at (time) search initiated for...)
for prisoners believed to be here. All enemy casualties placed under guard by available personnel.

Installation approximately four times the size indicated by intelligence briefings. Recommend that vetting of current intelligence sources increase in frequency and that accuracy be primary goal thereof. SOG-4 S4 indicates that data recovered from facility should make it possible to develop additional sources.

Prisoners located on the lowest level. Indications are that pirate group did not favor advanced interrogation techniques. All prisoners held in a common area where they could watch as
( This is more Deans area but maybe ...could watch while fellow prisoners were interrogated and tortured)
interrogation and torture. Initial intelligence reports about Pirates being in league with slavers are probably accurate although further analysis of new data indicated.

Report of typical treatment of prisoner included to facilitate understanding of seriousness of situation. Following is an excerpt of the initial interview of Lt Jana Hunter of CSE Howler: Formal report in appendix.
(Oh Boy sex and violence!!)

I was captured while on special assignment to survey a suspected pirate route. We were to simply attempt to locate any beacons and were in one of the
( a lightly armed, or better yet, an unarmed, give the girl an excuse to give up so easily)
combat shuttles. No problems were anticipated.


The pirate cruiser surprised us and I made the decision to surrender rather than fight a battle I had no chance of winning. We were taken aboard and placed in chains, and then our uniforms were cut away and discarded. The make up of my crew was three male and two female, including myself.

The men were secured to the bulkhead and Electronics Technician Keller and I were forced to perform sexual acts on each of them.
(Come on Rhabbi, these are fuckin nasty pirates. Give us a reason to hate and fear them. No way would they let the navy men get their jollies unless it served some sadistic purpose,
The women were forced to perform oral sex on the poor swabbies while the men were being slowly strangled. (then if you’re really pushing it you could mention that two of them climaxed before their execution was complete.)
*** the preceding depends on the audience you are targeting if other than adult kink you probably went in the right direction but I’d still want some nasty details just to give the pirates their bona fides as really bad dudes***

We were then raped by the (entire)crew of the cruiser.(but of course my dear, the price of surrender)

The interviews with other prisoners indicate similar stories. The interviews clearly indicate that the pirates are much worse than intelligence reports suggested.

Prisoners also indicate that SOG-4 were not responsible for their rescue. Testimony indicated a group of naval personnel had entered the base just before our entry. Descriptions of gear and uniforms indicate that the personnel equipped with obsolete equipment. Previous encounters with enemy casualties indicate that we do not currently know weaponry that they used.

MIA FN Goode located in the dispensary. Serious wound had been dressed and treated. We were unable to determine the persons responsible for treating FN Goode’s injuries. Only clue was a log chip that was forwarded because local decryption unable to open it.
EOAAR 1315 Operation Recover SOG-4 Cdr. Fraks.

“Interesting. Was the log mentioned decrypted?”

“Yes. That is why I am here. I am not sure what to believe.”

“Why not?”

“It is a complete log of CSE Phoenix.”
(an earlier chapter/prequel?)

Admiral Harrison just looked back at her friend.

“”Before you ask, we are sure. A ghost ship and crew pulled off a rescue that was beyond that of our best Special Operations Group. They also saved the bacon of our newest cruiser. Even though Lexington will be in the yards for a year, if the Phoenix had not shown up she would have been lost.”

Adm. Harrison slowly settled back in her chair.

A nice tease Rhabbi, you did well with the economy of words part,
you've got your damsel, ( a couple that could be developed actually )
You've got your pirates, though they could be nastier, it's a matter of taste I suppose .
You've got your heroic ghosts but you definitely stinted there, much more to say and the log of the ghost ship is a cheeky twist at best.
The only bloody arrogance I see is of the high command and it's reliance
on piss poor intel but even that is only hinted at. It is unclear how the pirates arrogance lead to their downfall.
Were you planning to use those last 500 words to cover those few minor glitches?

have your gurl call mine, lets talk.
Mad and Lews