First, let me say that yes, that was a real conversation between Rhabbi and myself in IM, and he really did feel like banging his head against a wall.
Secondly, I want my grammar check back! The cheat is that Microsoft Word leaves little red and green squiggles under some things so I couldn't help but go back and attempt to fix them.
I tried to remember tenses, not switching from present to past. I was trying very hard to describe the actions clearly that once again I don't think I took the extra mile to describe the setting so well.
Let me have it. I want to see if I've learned anything from the last story.