Cute, sweet, and so very human. The realism is palpable, the experience so spot on everyone can relate. I do have two quibbles though.
I've never really understood the use of the word kneeled, I just can't wrap my tongue around it. I see it used all the time but I always felt it should be knelt.
The other one is What kind of an asshole would restrict a story to 1450 words?
Come on get real, why 1450? Why not 1,500 or 2,000 or even a thousand? Just seems a little ridiculous IMHO.
Other than that bit the whole thing was a classy vignette even without a spelling and grammar check.
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English does not borrow from other languages. English follows other languages into dark alleys, raps them over the head with a cudgel, then goes through their pockets for loose vocabulary and spare grammar.
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