Yes, Rhabbi, I'd love to know what changes you were looking for; I don't recall (but my memory fails me often, lol) any specific comments from you previously? Were you looking for editing/style changes, such as Ruby has suggested, or for content changes, or for something else?

Ruby, thank you for changing the thread title - it does seem to have worked! and thank you for the detailed review. I shall work on it.

Glad you like it, despite its evident flaws.