I actually didn't mean to dump a brand new novel on you.... Yeah I guess I did.
The funny thing about the creative process is the synergy that can develop. It really can help to have two or three stories up in the air. I confess I'm curious about this one (the pirates and the ghost ship) and will eagerly read what you want to share. As for the short story in need of a stiff pokingwell that's more along Mr Deans expertise but lets have at it.
A common technique for real writers (so I've been told) is to develop a network of two or three fellow writers to read and critique as you are developing a story. Some swear by a R/L face to face meeting on a regular (often weekly) basis. Others feel an internet exchange works just fine. This should be more than a technical picking of nits it should be a real exchange of ideas, Where's the story going? Why the hell did you do that to character X for? I liked her, besides now how are you gona fix Y's broken warp drive if X has gone off to.....
you get the idea, talk about the big picture of the story leave the niggling details for later.
If you want to post the short I'll talk to Dean, he's already sharpening his fork and club.
Mad