Thank you!

I had a lot of trouble with this one, my assignment was active voice, past tense, first person male perspective. There were a few other things, had to have a male and a female character, a dungeon, and a supernatural creature...I interpreted active voice to be short, active, to the point. I looked it up. This is what I came up with. I sensed there were a lot of problems, and I do not in any way resent any suggestions.

How could I do the whole thing with no narrative? Can the first person narrate some parts of their story? I am going to pour over what you have said and try try try to get it, and then do it better.

Thanks, no need to be gentle. You know how cats can be...

BP