Hi BP,

Thank you for your patience.

To say this has been a crazy work week, would sum it up.

Meanwhile, active tense does not have to mean short sentences. Shorten or lengthen those sentences to add a bit of pacing and use those conjunctions to string a bunch of sentences together when needed.

I'm really looking forward to spending some time with this story. However, since you've gotten some great feedback, feel free to work on the next draft.

Ruby