Very nice work SK,
You managed to slide those seven sentences in so smoothly I was looking for the tube of lubricant. My only problem was with the fast paced banter it was sometimes difficult to tell who was talking. A few attributions of he said/she said would help. Not every quote but maybe every third or fourth.
The story line is hot and you let us know exactly how these two mesh together. I like that and hope to see more of that in your writing.
I've read the first two chapters of LOF and sent you an e-mail with comments.
Yours
Mad Lews

BTW substitute camera parts for pc boards and throw in a few more scattered books and notebooks on the floor and you've described my office to a T