Hello LC,

First, let me say, I absolutely understand how challenging this task is. A couple of things,

1. The first names, Adept, used for two of the male characters was confusing. I had to go back and re-read to make sure I knew which Adept was speaking and which Adept was being talked about.

2. It's almost a monologue.

3. I'd like to know more about the other two characters mentioned, the other Adept and Catherine, through the speaker's voice.

If this sounds confusing, please say so and I'll try to be clearer.