Alright, I'll make this as quick as possible. There is nothing that ruins a great story/hard-on faster, than reading what begins as a stellar depiction of a brutal and merciless rape of a young girl, and just as I'm transfixed in the fantasy, It is ruined as I am quickly forced out the fantasy due to the same bullshit that destroys all posibility of realism, and thus kills the fantasy for me. For example, when the hot little virgin teen cunt is being brutally sodomized with the barrell of a Louisville Slugger, all while her previously virgin cunt is forced down to take all 24 inches of giraffe cock simultaneously, why does that strangely arousing image have to be ruined with some bullshit like, "but then as little Susie regained consciousness after passing out for the fourth time from this ungodly nightmare of pain that only the sinister combo of a giraffe and Louisville Slugger could properly administer, she started to feel an intense wave rush over her pain-racked body. But unlike the waves of unspeakeable misery that she had been lost in till now, this one was good as she started to orgasm uncontrolably, begging her demented rapist to shove all 34 inches of that cold aluminum into her destroyed asshole, as wave after wave of pleasure....." yada-yada- bullshit! I mean C'mon, I think I can safetly say that it is 100x more plausible for a young virgin to be raped by a sadistic criminal and his pet giraffe, that it is for her to like it. Anyways, I have no problem with stories that are written with an obviously fictious setting and situation intact, and these pain sluts love this intense torture. But if it starts out in your average suburban neighborhood, where the young girl is kidnapped on her way home from school by a neighbor that had been watching and plotting his time to take her and the story flows like a real life situation, then my advice is to keep this well written plotline and make it realsitic and the story should spend more time raping and using the girl for his sexual desires than it does talking about stupid shit that is completely unrelated to the fantasy being depicted. P.S. One Idea that I would love to see used more often and more thouroughly is the use of ring gags. For me, this is the epitome of what the word nonconsentual sex means. Due to the possiblilty of asphyxtiation, it has got to be the most terrifying thing for a person having lost any and all protection from anything of any length forced into their wide open throats. So more ring gags would be fantastic.