Ophelia Fey's Second Assignment

[Ophelia Fey]

Thank you. I appreciate the grammar and punctuation corrections, I should revise and edit more thoroughly. Some of your points I will incorporate, but other parts, I like far better the way I wrote them, and am disinclined to change them. I've rewritten and rewritten this response, trying not to sound like such a cunt.

I think the thing that bothers me the most is the idea that I have to cater to readers with attention spans of gnats. What if the pace and mood are not about quickly beating hearts and a lunchtime splooge under the desk?
Should there be some sort of warning - this story is not paced or written for those in a hurry?

I'm not interested in punchy. Readers should do cardio if they want to increase their heart rates. I enjoy long, luscious sentences, stretched out like caramel; with a long finish, like a Pinot Noir full of black fruit.
I want to devour slow, intricate, detailed, mind fuck sex stories, and I aspire to write them as well.

I'm certain that I'm not alone in seeking out stories that are detailed and require the reader to engage. If the expectation is to write to some common denominator, maybe this course isn't for me.