Quote Originally Posted by Ophelia Fey View Post
Thank you. I appreciate the grammar and punctuation corrections, I should revise and edit more thoroughly. Some of your points I will incorporate, but other parts, I like far better the way I wrote them, and am disinclined to change them. I've rewritten and rewritten this response, trying not to sound like such a cunt.
Hi Ophilia Fey,

Take what you will you are the creator of your piece, I just offer suggestions. There are clearly many ways to write about the same thing and you as the author get to pick the way you want to craft your story.

I think the thing that bothers me the most is the idea that I have to cater to readers with attention spans of gnats.
Huh?

What if the pace and mood are not about quickly beating hearts and a lunchtime splooge under the desk?
Should there be some sort of warning - this story is not paced or written for those in a hurry?
You crack me up. Write for yourself first. The rest of us are here to encourage you, and help take your writing to the next level, wherever that may be.

The pace and mood of any piece are up to you, unless you've been assigned something that states otherwise.

Warning: You may not like or enjoy all of the writing assignments in this course.

I'm not interested in punchy. Readers should do cardio if they want to increase their heart rates.


I enjoy long, luscious sentences, stretched out like caramel; with a long finish, like a Pinot Noir full of black fruit. I want to devour slow, intricate, detailed, mind fuck sex stories, and I aspire to write them as well.
Go you!

Knowing what you like to read and what you want to write can make things much easier in the long run.

I'm certain that I'm not alone in seeking out stories that are detailed and require the reader to engage.
No, you aren't alone.

If the expectation is to write to some common denominator, maybe this course isn't for me.
Where the frack did that come from?
Who on earth asked you to do that?
Are you reading more into the suggestions than are written?

When any of your instructors or fellow students offer pointers, you can do what you want with them.

This is a volunteer course. We are all volunteering our time and energy to help and encourage each other. There are no formal grades, and you won't get a certificate for passing this course.

Your ego may not always like the comments about any of your assignments, or the suggestions given from members in this area. That's reality.

What concerns me most, is that I really liked your story, and you seem to be full of piss and vinegar because my editing suggestions weren't as you might have wanted them. Heck, after a re-read, they may not be as I would have wanted them either. That's why they were just suggestions.

To your success,

Ruby