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Coed Baby Sitter Bound And Abused
Author: Dreamer
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(Added on Apr 14, 2001)
(This month 39016 readers) (Total 109587 readers) |
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College coed Penney could use a few bucks, babysitting the weekend with a couple of adolescent kids seemed quite easy. Before she realized how wrong she was it was too late. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
chzwiz007
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Nov 27, 2011 |
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Got very old at the end. Also I believe they need a way out, even if they are called back on the weekends. A bit of a downer for me. (4/10)
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a07002
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Aug 4, 2008 |
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The point of view keeps shifting from first character to narrator wthout reason or logic. basically a good story, but writing skills need some work. (2/10)
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rcb
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Dec 23, 2003 |
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Needs a bit more descriptive writing, but otherwise quite good. (9/10)
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TheCat
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Dec 13, 2003 |
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Thanks for the effort, but it has no suspense, no build-up, no worry prior to the painful events. No character development for the boys or girls - just things they do. It would appear that you had a list of things to include, and you did, but that doesn't make a good story. (5/10)
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mkemse
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Dec 1, 2003 |
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Need I say more, great theme, good story, hope there is more (10/10)
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RubbrSpatula
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Feb 23, 2002 |
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Story 10, execution 2. Bad grammar and the coed switches names in one paragraph. The perspective also switches as soon as the action begins. Started to get a bit repetitive (read it, you'll see).
This story needs to be re-written, with TLC. I'm serious. I loved the story, but I feel it's hastily written and needing a make-over. (6/10)
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SpeechMastr
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Oct 19, 2001 |
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Excellent story. The kids are insatiable. It would have been close to a perfect story if we could have a better understanding of what was going through the minds of the babysitter and her friend as they are transformed into slave sluts. (9/10)
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umstefa
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Oct 3, 2001 |
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Best storey I have read yet (10/10)
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