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Chloe's Experience
Author: Brittany Heart
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(Added on Sep 14, 2005)
(This month 17747 readers) (Total 43076 readers) |
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Hot, sexy, naughty Chloe get punished by her mom for getting bad grades, than teaches her girlfriend the art of BDSM |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Feb 9, 2009 |
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Nevermind people like Equalizer. You wrote a good story, which has its place among the better tales in this Library...
I liked it.
I'd give it an 8, but...
8+2=10 to even-out a bit on Equalizer's unfair score.
JJ (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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May 11, 2006 |
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dman your good, i judge stories on how they fow, the concept the idea, spell checking and puncuation are important, but if i like the story i gnenraly lok around small items as i call them and judge a story based on it's mertis, nobody is perfect and as i found out recently is is speel check it miss 3 words i type in error on purpose
so for me, keep up the great work, i have reviwed over 1,900 stories on this site (look at my review list, the number is eact not and appromiation) so i know at this point what look for in stories and base my reviews on that (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Pinhead
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Oct 2, 2005 |
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cool story. Brit Heart will tear your soul APART! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Equalizer
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Oct 2, 2005 |
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Why 1*? I quote the first paragraph:
"It was one of those worm days where you could just wake up without worrying that something bad is gonna happen to you. And even though the semester grades were due today, Chloe didn't worry about them because she knew they where gonna be bad and realized a long time ago that she gonna be punished for it." (1/10)
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- Replied by:
tiffany love
(Edit) (Oct 2, 2005)
- Hey buddy are you stoned or something? Get off the pipe!!
- Replied by:
Equalizer
(Edit) (Oct 2, 2005)
- Isn't it funny how Tiffany Love responded to my review just moments after I made it. It's as if she had been notified of my review at the same time as Brittany Heart! Draw your own conclusions folks.
- Replied by:
tiffany love
(Edit) (Oct 2, 2005)
- Ok, Brittany is my girl friend, she gave me a call and we chat. what pissed her the most was the fact that you didn't even READ THE WHOLE STORY. you just judge it by the first paragraph.
3 people gave her a 5
one guy have her a 4
and you have her 1/2 and you didn't give a good reason!! at least you could have been polite and read the Whole story and then judge! see the problem?
- Replied by:
brittany heart
(Edit) (Oct 2, 2005)
- How about a challenge buddy boy, you publish one and I grade it, because you gave a bad review to many, and yet I haven’t seen one written by you, what do you say? Are you gonna chicken out?
- Replied by:
Equalizer
(Edit) (Oct 3, 2005)
- If Brittany is such a good friend why don't you ask her to PROOFREAD your work? Wouldn't that be a more constructive and honest way to get some good reviews?
- Replied by:
brittany heart
(Edit) (Oct 3, 2005)
- i got some good reviews, look at
Jeanne
Rowling
Pinhead
Dododecapod
or mabee the problem is that you CAN'T READ!!
- Replied by:
Equalizer
(Edit) (Oct 4, 2005)
- I can read perfectly well, and that's why I gave your writing 1 star.
Admittedly some reviewers gave you generous reviews here, and a quick glance at your subsequent efforts show improvement. However, of this story, others said "Technical writing skills are poor", and "The spelling and grammar is downright horrid."
Have a worm day!
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| Reviewer:
Dododecapod
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Sep 18, 2005 |
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Quite erotic and fun. This could have been much less enjoyable, but the lighthearted tone and rather charming style made it a quick, easy read and most entertaining.
You do need to edit a little better. You've clearly spellchecked this work, but that won't catch misspellings that make an otherwise correct word, such as (in this case) "bended" when you ment "bent and "tinny" when you meant "tiny". In at least one place your grammar falls apart also. Manual editing, preferably by someone not the author, is always a good idea.
That said, This was a really pleasing piece, and very well done. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
tiffany love
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Sep 16, 2005 |
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Absolutely brilliant! Every line turned me on! A Masterpiece! Even though the spelling wasn’t perfect, the images and description did the job. Don’t judge the story by its spelling, but by the perfect content. This ain't a english class! A MUST READ
Brittany Heart, you go girl!!
(10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Oden
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Sep 14, 2005 |
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Technical writting skills are poor. The plot, even for a short story is not very well developed. Editing and proof reading would improve the story. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Jacen
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Sep 14, 2005 |
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The spelling and grammar is downright horrid. the story seemed ok, but the need for editing on EVERY SINGLE LINE was a killer (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
jeanne
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Sep 14, 2005 |
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The exact mix of naughty-nasty which turns me on, with young girls going all the way and having no mercy for their shaved pussies. Why oh why 'THE END'??? (9/10)
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