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John\'s Entrapment
Author: Ann Bech
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(Added on Mar 9, 2006)
(This month 34794 readers) (Total 72881 readers) |
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John wins the lottery, but finds it to be short lived when Amber is the one that really wins. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
DungeonMaster6
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Mar 14, 2009 |
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I'm okay with this story until Beth, a thirteen year old has sex with John at the behest of her mother. Yes, it was despicable that Amber was raped and became pregnant, but what she did with her daughter is even more despicable. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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May 5, 2006 |
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Excellent story about forcing a semi-willing man into total submission. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Wistan
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May 5, 2006 |
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I love stories of women enslaving an unwilling men, and this one is certainly a powerful example of the type. Amber's technique for enslaving John is quite original and massively perverse, and she sure pulls no punches when it comes time for punishment!
I'd like to have had a more slow paced story - this is written as a description of events, whereas I find that when the writer takes time to give us dialogue and explain people's thoughts, it gives the reader picture the scene better, gives him a more intimate connection with the story. But that aside, I can't deny that this is a great little piece. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
ann31401
(Edit) (May 8, 2006)
- Thank you for your reply. I have also had criticisms that it did move quickly enough. I guess everyone has their own pace.
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| Reviewer:
bigcat
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Mar 9, 2006 |
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Heavy duty, dude. Good setup, good twist. Well done. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
ms2bused
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Mar 9, 2006 |
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I was prompted to give this story a 10, but as I am a biased, and highly devout lesbian woman, in good conscience I could only rate it a 9! If the male had been female ( which I enthusiastically used my imagination to create), I would have given it totally top honors in every phase!
A new and avid fan,
neenee
(JaneenMarie O'Brien) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
ann31401
(Edit) (May 8, 2006)
- Thank you for your comment. Unfortunately, making the captured one a female would have significantly changed the story. Being a lesbian, don't you think that this was appropriate treatment for a male?
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| Reviewer:
blackoak
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Mar 9, 2006 |
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liked that john was made to obey. (8/10)
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