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Fulfillment
Author: Papierklammer
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(Added on May 18, 2007)
(This month 55918 readers) (Total 71541 readers) |
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A wife achieves her destiny with a new role in her husband�s household. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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May 19, 2007 |
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I enjoyed your story, but your grammar was seriously lacking. Perhaps English is not your first language? Improve your grammar and I will be happy to raise your score. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Shakespeare_I._Aint
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May 19, 2007 |
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Beastility stories aren't usually that good--this one is better than 99% of the ones out there! Good job! (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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May 19, 2007 |
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A very hot story, intense even, and touching a lot of hot buttons.
Yes it needs to be cleaned up a bit. (bet you never thought there'd be a grammar review did you?)The best recommendation I can give. Let it sit for a few days then reread it carefully (even aloud) to catch some of those little gaffes. If you feel like it you might hit the forum and check out the �Author�s Garret�
http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?f=41
You could easily find someone to help with editing. It�s amazing how helpful a second set of eyes is.
You�ve got great writing potential, keep it up.
(8/10)
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| Reviewer:
ElectricBadger
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May 19, 2007 |
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A nice story, good flow and dialogue and well imagined, but there's a lot of trouble with the technical details -- wrong words, incomplete sentences, etc. A gem in the rough! (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Snark
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May 18, 2007 |
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The premise and progresssion work, but serious editing is called for. Words are left out, wrong words subsituted (spell checker doesn't do grammer.) A little more work could result in a geatly improved story. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
JayTC
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May 18, 2007 |
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Very good fantasy....very interesting read! (8/10)
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