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The Camping Holiday
Author: Excalibur
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(Added on Jul 12, 2007)
(This month 9416 readers) (Total 18903 readers) |
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two girls on holiday get more than they expect |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Jul 15, 2007 |
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I have to agree that writing in the second person really doesn't work here, but it's a good, short story, nontheless. I liked the ending. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Jul 13, 2007 |
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I think your story would have been better had you written in the past tense. Your story "voice" is just not strong, IMHO. (6/10)
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