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Manuela's Execution
Author: vonka
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(Added on Mar 30, 2010)
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Manuela M., you are found guilty of the crimes of adultery and fornication. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
fitzgilbert
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Apr 3, 2010 |
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pas de suite possible helas! (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Michael247
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I want to point out that the author is obviously not a native English speaker. With that said, he actually did a pretty good job grammatically. Unfortunately, despite the interesting colors for his background and font, the lack of paragraph breaks made the piece difficult to read. The plot device was an old one, frequently used here at the BDSM Library, with only the execution methodology being different. Here is where the author shines. The descriptions are graphic, detailed, and easily changed from words to images by the reader's imagination. That said, I felt that the scene moved very quickly, without giving the reader time to build up their own internal feelings about what was happening. It was a lot like having premature ejaculation. Just as things get going - boom - its over. This story should have been a bit longer, to give the reader's time to build up. In any event, it was still decent, but it needs some work. (5/10)
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travelin.fool
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Apr 1, 2010 |
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What happened to her lover? (10/10)
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Mr. Willit
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Mar 31, 2010 |
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I'm giving 10/10 because I love the colors. How did you make it look like that? (10/10)
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