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Gym Girl
Author: James P
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(Added on Oct 12, 2010)
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A man mouths off to the wrong girl at his gym at work. She methodically plots her revenge. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 12, 2010 |
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I don't usually read femdom stories, 'xept when women dominate other women.
Stumbled in because I noticed the rating going up and down like a yo-yo.
Well, to be fair, I also found a lot of slip-ups and other mistakes, but since I seldom base my rating on the amount of faults I encounter, they won't affect my 'score'.
If and when the writing style and adroitness exhibited in "Gym Girl" are James P's 'usual' standard, then one can't do else but give praise. Because "Gym Girl" is very well written with some well done dialogue, musings and all-round descriptions.
And although this is a teaser, the story 'ends' with a cliffhanger of some sorts, but that cliffhanger could well do as a 'regular' ending, to let the reader fill-in his own continuation.
My only regret is that the warning that the rest of the story must be paid for, comes at the end, when it should sit at the beginning.
Can't promise I'll have a go at other Jame P stories --like I said, I don't dig femdom stories that much-- but who knows.
JJ (8/10)
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- Replied by:
James P
(Edit) (Oct 14, 2010)
- Thanks for your thoughtful review. I apologize to readers who feel duped and were expecting the full story. In the future I will make sure to indicate up front whether I'm posting a 'teaser' or the full story. And maledom fans will be happy to know I'll be posting a full maledom story before the end of 2010 if I ever get around to editing it. -James P. (www.jamespendergrass.com)
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