Hi Alex,
It still has punch in the re-reading. The new perspectives and details flesh it out nicely. BTW phallic is the adjective of phallus the noun. (quick change that before eb sees! I'll try to distract her.)
Done! *hugs* Thanks, Mad, you're always kind to me.
You can suck 'em, and suck 'em, and suck 'em, and they never get any smaller. ~ Willy Wonka